Monday, 18 August 2008

Writing assignment 1
Question 1
There are three reasons why people resist new technology. The first one is that new technology may not be affordable for ordinary people. The price of the applications using such new technology is usually high, so people will think twice before buying it. If the technology is an upgrade, people have to buy new applications in order to use the new technology, which will cost much money. Thus, in most cases people will just use the current one. There is another tendency that people will wait for the price to go down. The second reason is habit. If one is accustomed to the current technology, he will probably not apply the new tech, especially when the current tech is enough for his usage. People are used to the current technology, so they tend not to change their habit even if the new technology seems to be nice. The third reason is that people are afraid that the new technology may not be as perfect as the old one. People usually think that whatever new has to be tested. Only after a certain time or using by other people will most people accept it and try it themselves. These are the three reasons why people tend to resist new technology.

3 comments:

justin lim said...

I would like to know where the main idea is quoted from. However, the introduction is stated clearly . I believe it would be better if all three reasons can be categorized into three paragraphs.The first thesis statement of the first reason is not very complete. I think it would be better if it sounds "new technology may not be affordable for ordinary people because.....".

Moving on to the second and third paragraph, i think it can further elaborated. Overall, i think some of the sentences can be combined by using some coordinators so that it may sound more fluent.

This is my first time commenting on essays. I m sorry if i sound too harsh. However, u can " fire" back on me...my essay won't be that good after all.

PJIyong said...

First of all,I think this post is quite short. I think it is about 200 words. Like what justin said,you can separate the three reasons to three different paragraph. Then you can elaborate more on the points.
Well,the way you write follows chronological order. Somehow it sounds boring as you are listing the first,second and third reason.
Overall there are no mistakes. Anyway try to vary the sentence,since you are using the same pattern.

PJIyong said...

Well, sorry to sound harsh. Anyway please do comment on my essay.